ORIGINAL:
Once upon a time, there lived a happy old gentleman whose name was Stanley. He lived alone in his little cottage in the woods. But once in a while he would have guests. His guests names were Mason and Kylie. They would visit the old man every week. They liked to go and see him for they had no friends back in the city. But every now and then they would go and visit Stanley and the old man would always give them little round yellow candies. Mason and Kylie would pester the old man with many silly questions, like who was his first love and what was here favorite school subject. Stanly answered every question carefully. After they had chatted a little bit Stanly would give them some of his lemonade. It was really delicious and the children liked it a lot. Then they would say goodbye and go home.
The end
POLISHED:
Once upon a time, there lived a happy old gentleman whose name was Stanley. He lived alone in his little cottage in the woods. But once in a while, he would have guests. His guests' names were Mason and Kylie. They would visit the old man every week. They liked to go and see him, for they had no friends back in the city. But every now and then, they would go and visit Stanley, and the old man would always give them little round yellow candies. Mason and Kylie would pester the old man with many silly questions, like who was his first love and what was his favorite school subject. Stanly answered every question carefully. After they had chatted a little bit, Stanly would give them some of his lemonade. It was really delicious, and the children liked it a lot. Then they would say goodbye and go home.