Sentence Structure & Clarity (Top Priority)
Why: Even if your ideas are amazing, unclear or awkward sentences will block the reader's immersion.
What to work on:
Avoid run-on or confusing sentencesUse punctuation properly (especially commas and periods)Make sure subjects and verbs match and the action is clear
Exercise: Take one messy paragraph a day and rewrite it to be smooth, clean, and clear. Read it out loud—it should flow like dialogue or narration from a movie.
Emotional Control (Pacing & Beats)
Why: You have great emotional ideas—birth, joy, grief, betrayal—but you rush them.
What to work on:
Slow down at key emotional momentsUse short, punchy sentences for tension or fearLet dialogue breathe—don't cram too much in one line
Exercise: Rewrite one scene (e.g. "mother dying") with maximum emotional pacing. Count heartbeats between actions. Make the reader feel it.
Descriptive Language (Sensory Detail)
Why: Your visuals are good but not cinematic. You use a lot of general terms—fine, but you can push it further.
What to work on:
Use stronger nouns and vivid verbsAdd smell, sound, touch—not just sight
Exercise: Take one line like "blood splattered across the room" and rewrite it 5 different ways using different senses or angles.
Dialogue Realism & Voice
Why: Some lines sound like narration instead of real speech under stress or emotion.
What to work on:
Read dialogue out loudAsk: "Would I say this? Would this character say it like this?"Use contractions, hesitation, and emotion to make it real
Exercise: Take one dramatic line like "Die you demons" and rewrite it in 5 voices (panicked, calm, possessed, regretful, insane).
Final Tip: One Scene at a Time
Don't try to fix your whole writing style at once. Pick one short scene (1–2 paragraphs) and polish it like it's your demo reel. Learn to build power in small units, then scale up.