Now, before I start let me make this clear. When I say "concepts" i'm not talking about the cultivation version I'm talking about i'm talking about when the story have good azbits, or concepts in them, or what other people might call "good hooks" to them now, you probably wondering why I talk about the subject to begin. Well, that's because a specific web novel called " reborn in hell with a skill creation system " more specifically, the system itself, and you can definitely tell.It takes some attributes from the "custom made demon king" line ( which is not bad to begin with if it takes some beginning attributes, such a the egg) but that's about where the rest falls now there is a lot here, so i'm going roughly split into three subjects that would envelop the others 1 the pace of that story ( it feels very fast, like someone hit the fast forward button, with no time of actual building up to it) 2 the main character itself ( it feels like less of a human being recarnated as a demon. It moon like a demon who have memories of a human
Like at the beginning he at least acts like a hipman, but not very long after he leaves his " beginner sone" he completely lost himself.
Now I won't describe exactly what he did to make me think like that. But to point out simply, he decided to going to a war ( which to clarify, he
Decided to be at the edge of said war to be fair) end up being captured In revealing his "status" ( hey big taboo for recarnators obviously) in the worst part, even when he have enough points to improve his skills ( and way more afterwards) he doesn't and instead, he we refuse to use any of them ( unless IS a emergency, such as in a battle which for anyone who don't know, no How difficult is it to do anything in a battle Other than fighting of course it is very difficult) like, seriously, I believe the only time when you actually bothers with preparing at all. Was a detestion type skill, not even a defensive type one ( wishes, very a porton oh, let's see if you were in a arena where you need to kill your opponent) and that's not even the worst parts about it.I believe in total he have two grove type abilities ( pS when I say growth type abilities, I mean skills that help the user too grow stronger. Easier, such as in ignore, passively, exorbing souls) roughly 3 scanning base scales ( which basically means he knows his enemies
Reaction in current state, which is yes useful in a battle. But that white useless for creatures that is stronger than you) 1 emergency skill ( which he only created
In mid battle to begin with And even then still lost to his target and almost got killed to begin with) and that's it, and the worst part about it is he haven't even bothered improving his beginning. Skills in any way, not even to complete them ( even though once again, he have way more than what he needs to do so) and do you know what is uncomplete In his skill set his two f c k growth skills rich means for every second. He haven't even bothered completing them in any way, the longer okay. He is wasting his grup. Like, for example, the wartime area. If he gathered just enough souls to complete his so exorbiting scale he would get way more than just simply standing there to begin with, not to mention his ineviting ability to begin with ( which improves his physical stats to begin with) which leads me to my final main problem.Number 3 chapter stuffing ( what I mean is some riders perfectly stuff on tapters with frankly, useless stuff like world background that the main character don't know about or other people's pavs, which once again, the main character don't no about to begin with or not.Even connected to it) this web now have whole entire sections of nothing but useless garvil Oh frankly useless stuff where it doesn't even make sense. Why would the main character even need to know to begin with ( which is why I call it chapter stuffing Kind of like stuffing up a Turkey) not to mention the big, long text explaining, literally nothing, a Portland at all, literally no, I am it.I didn't read the whole red novel ( i only read the free chapters. And I really don't wanna raise money on it. Just to see what they did) but it is like anything like the free chapters. I honestly think it won't last that long. At least a 100 chapters. It's already frankly, a miracle by itself.And the sapphire of it is motivated, probably stuffing to begin with
All y'all it honestly have potential, so don't get me wrong. It's just the guy wasted it so badly like if someone else got the wrong frame of the story and we build it from there. It were honestly be a pretty good story bye then. But now it's like the guy just thrown some added steak and stuff the hole inside with feathers not even good feathers like Siegel feathers or something like that It's honestly, make me feel kind of disappointed. Add it, mike, a father kind of disappointment
(Ps and yes, I know. It has been a while since I released a new chapter and don't bother telling me how many mistakes I made.I'm using text to speech, of course, you're gonna have problems with it)