This is my first fanfic critisism is welcomed

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Synopsis:
A soul drifts away from the cycle of reincarnation and into the void, something that has never happened before. A large amount of time passes with nothing happening, until an entity appears before the soul. Read to find out more.

Current world: DxD

Finished worlds: Arifureta

Cover is not mine 
Characters and the original story in this fanfic are also not mine all credit goes to their respective creators.

I will say this now this novel is pretty cliché, I am not forcing you to read. If you’re dissatisfied about the direction, flow or any other aspect of the novel you are free to leave and if you choose to leave a comment on the way out please make it helpful, and not something you wrote just to be hurtful. Please enjoy.

Also mc is strong since chap 4 be warned
Also, try to read until the start of Tortus before leaving criticism 
AU elements

Should I change yues name or keep it the same as the original or make her accept her other name Lalatina or whatever it was. Im too tired gn guys


Chapter 12 - Yue or different